Hey Jayden, I really enjoyed reading your poem.I like how you started to rhyme at the beginning of your poem.My advice to you would be to try extend it a little bit more but other then that keep up the good writing.
Malo Jayden, Another amazing poem that i have read really enjoy the way you and william put this poem together. Just as some advice maybe you and william could try and add some rhyming words in it just to keep your readers hooked in. Amazing poem keep the hard work up.
Hey Jayden, I really enjoyed reading your poem.I like how you started to rhyme at the beginning of your poem.My advice to you would be to try extend it a little bit more but other then that keep up the good writing.
ReplyDeleteHi jaydan I really enjoyed reading your poem but it was just the start.
ReplyDeleteHi Jayden even though your poem is short It still talks about yourself really like your poem.
ReplyDeleteHey Jayden I really enjoyed reading your poem I hope to hear more from you
ReplyDeleteMalo Jayden, Another amazing poem that i have read really enjoy the way you and william put this poem together. Just as some advice maybe you and william could try and add some rhyming words in it just to keep your readers hooked in. Amazing poem keep the hard work up.
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