Hooked Narrative

I worked with Mrs. Moala to create a hook for my narrative. I wrote my new hook in red.

"Laaa laaa laaaa!" The song could be heard across the ocean. There was a boy volcano named Joe and he wanted someone to Lava but did not now there was someone growing under the ocean and he got older and older he got deeper into the ocean but when she came out of the ocean she didn't see him but he got fully under the ocean she sung and he popped out of the ocean. And they lived happily ever after.